Not everything needs to be a single sentence. "The tank of hydraulic fluid ran out before landing. This tank powered the fins that steer the rocket. Therefore the rocket could no longer be steered."
Or there's the ablative: "The tank of hydraulic fluid having been emptied, the fins could no longer steer the rocket."
I'd argue that's because it's wrong; not massively wrong, but wrong. You can have a parenthesis with commata on both sides (as siblings have suggested), or you can (just) write the same sentence with no commata at all and it would make sense, but a single comma in that position is a mistake.
Where's the passive? "The tank ... ran out of fluid" isn't passive. (If it is, then "the heroes ran out of time", "the car ran out of gas", "I ran out of money" and "the airplane ran out of runway" also use passive voice, yes? What is the active equivalent?)
"hydraulic fluid that powered the fins enabling them to rotate and steer" isn't passive either. Poorly written, certainly.
I double-checked with the examples in http://www.lel.ed.ac.uk/~gpullum/passive_loathing.pdf and still didn't see a match. FWIW, that paper also comments "mistaken charges of using the passive voice are commonplace".
My apologies, I read 'to rotate' as passive but it isn't at second pass. I should have tried rewriting it as active voice and it would have become obvious when I failed.
Guys aren't really hitting it on the head. It's about the level of behavior that companies release analysis on.
See, there's another company that occasionally releases interesting data analytics: Google.
See: Word frequency over time, Predicting the spread of viruses from searches, etc.
The issue is that Uber is trying to explain motive and behavior at the individual level ("I know something about you!"). This is something that would be a definite no-no for Google. The cheekiness of the language certainly doesn't help either.
Yes! We should require all CAR drivers to wear helmets. Imagine how less likely drivers are to engage in road rage when they're wearing dorky helmets, not to mention safety on the road.
it's definitely an extreme data point, though car ownership in SF is expensive no matter how you cut it (most of that maintenance goes into fixing stuff that happens to it when parked on the street, and parking garages are always expensive).
i could definitely get a car that depreciates less. it's old battery tech at this point.
This is why no one wants to work at [Your Stupid Hedge Fund Here].
A while ago there was an article about how Wall Street was bemoaning the difficulty of recruiting top talent from tech.
Surprise: It isn't the money. There's plenty of money there. It's the total lack of understanding on how programmers create value. And this is the result.
There's so much to expound on here, it's truly amazing.
